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All that said, however, I don’t think it’s at all obvious what they are really up to. And that’s why this is a gamble. This twist isn’t an “Ah, I should have seen it!” revelation like the one about the Lord Ruler at the end of
Mistborn
. Instead, it’s a twist that—hopefully—has just enough groundwork underneath it not to seem out of nowhere. I fully expect it to blindside most readers.

Parlin Is Dead

Parlin was always meant to die here. That’s one of the main reasons I left Vivenna with someone from Idris to be in her team, in fact. (The other reason is that I found it unrealistic that she wouldn’t have
somebody
with her.)

Maybe this is why Parlin never worked as a character, to be honest. I wonder if he was always in my mind as the character who was going to get killed by Tonk Fah, which kept me from giving him enough depth. I’m not sure; I do know that in the book as it stands, he’s probably the biggest component I wish I had time to change. I’m not certain what I could put in his place that wouldn’t distract too much from the plot—and wouldn’t take away from the humor of Denth and the mercenaries—but would still be sympathetic enough that when he dies here, it would be more powerful. But I would have liked to have found something.

Tonk Fah tortured him to death. He wasn’t supposed to, but he got carried away. It was an accident, as Denth claims. (Denth shouldn’t have left Tonks alone with the prisoner to continue the torturing.) Denth came back and found Parlin dead, and was annoyed and frustrated. He left Tonks behind, storming out in anger, and eventually found Jewels and Clod, who were talking to slum contacts and trying to find Vivenna. They came back to regroup.

Meanwhile, Tonks heard Vivenna enter, and knew it wasn’t Denth. He put his Breath into his clothing, then ducked back under the stairs, his lantern extinguished, wondering who had come. He wasn’t terribly surprised to find Vivenna. That was when Denth and Jewels got back and the rest of the situation went down.

I added the corpses of the agents of Vivenna’s father in the last draft, by the way, since I figured I wanted it to be more obvious what had happened to them.

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Siri Grows Her Hair for Susebron and Talks about Seduction

I think these two chapters best show off the tone reversals I was trying for in this book—and explain partially why I was all right with those early chapters being so different from the prologue. Following Vivenna’s biggest chapter for shocks, surprises, and failings, we come here—to what is one of the most flirtatious and calm of the Siri chapters.

You should have been able to notice some changes about Siri, one of the most subtle being her ability to control her hair. The hair is, in a way, an extension of the metaphor. In the beginning chapters, Siri wasn’t able to control it at all, and it always changed back right after she tried to make it go to a specific color. It did what it wanted, reflecting her attitudes, and kind of represented her ability (or lack of ability, in her case) to control the world around her.

Now, she’s able to manipulate things around her slightly to her liking. In contrast, Vivenna’s life is completely out of control. And the hair will respond.

Spoilers

Susebron is right to trust his priests. At least, he’s kind of right. They aren’t evil men, and they do want what is best for him—as long as that doesn’t include going against their traditions and rules. They believe they have the charge to protect Peacegiver’s Treasure, and the God King holds that treasure. They do feel bad for what they are required to do to him.

Their interpretation is extreme, but what would you do, if your god (Peacegiver) Commanded you that the Breaths be held and protected, but never used? Cutting out a man’s tongue to keep him from using that terrible power is the way they decided to deal with it. Harsh, but effective.

Either way, they aren’t planning to kill him. One of the big reversals I planned for this book from the concept stage was a world where the priests were good and the thieving crew was evil—a complete turnabout from
Mistborn
. Denth and his team were developed in my mind as an “anti-Kelsier’s Crew.” The priesthood, then, was to turn out to be maligned by the characters and actually working for their best interests.

In the end, I went with the evil crew idea, but the priests aren’t 100% without their flaws.

Siri and Susebron Eat a Midnight Meal

This is a scene lifted almost from my own life. While on my honeymoon, Emily and I thought we were being so indulgent by ordering room service at three a.m. It was on a cruise ship, and you can do that kind of thing without having to pay extra for it. It kind of felt like the entire ship’s kitchens were there for our whims. And so, a variation on the event popped up in this book.

That doesn’t happen to me very often in books. Usually, it’s hard to point toward one event in my life that inspired a scene. But those sorts of things are peppered throughout this book. Another one is the scene where Siri tries to look seductively at Susebron, then bursts into laughter. My wife is absolutely terrible at looking seductive—not because she isn’t pretty, but because whenever she tries, she ends up having a fit of laughter at how ridiculous she thinks she looks.

What else . . . oh, Susebron’s taste buds. A couple of people have e-mailed me about this. From my research (which could be wrong), I’ve come to understand that the old teaching that certain parts of your mouth have taste buds that focus on certain tastes is wrong. The conventional wisdom is that your “sweet” taste buds are on your tongue, and if it is removed, you won’t be able to taste sugar. (Which is why people e-mail me.)

That’s apparently an urban legend. All taste buds can taste all types of food, and while most of your taste buds are on the tongue, many are on the roof of the mouth too. So Susebron could taste sweets as well as he tastes anything else. [
Editor’s note: Different taste receptor cell types react to different tastes, but they appear in clusters alongside the other types. These clusters are located on the soft palate, upper esophagus, and epiglottis as well as the tongue.
]

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Vivenna Wanders, Then Is Confronted by a Thief Who Takes Her Dress

The next few Vivenna chapters are short. I wanted to convey that she’s on the streets for a time, but didn’t want us to have to wallow in her problems. I’ve seen books do that quite well, and I don’t want this novel to focus on it. (If you’re interested in one that does it well, Paula Volsky’s
Illusion
has a nice section about what it’s like to be a noblewoman who is forced to live on the streets.)

Instead, these chapters are the transition chapters for Vivenna’s character. The representation of her going as low as she can go, so that later she can begin to rebuild. The dress was a problem—it was way too distinctive, and it could sell for enough that she wouldn’t have to live on the streets. She could buy something cheap and modest, then put herself up in an inn. So, naturally, it had to get stolen.

I didn’t want to strip her all the way, though. We’ve been through enough of that with Siri, and I really didn’t want to go there in this situation. Vivenna can be brought down to the lows she needs to reach without having to be raped by a random man in an alley. (Personally, I think that rape is overused in a lot of fiction.)

Vivenna Hides Her Breath in a Shawl

This has been possible from the beginning, and if Denth had truly been on her side, he would have admitted that there’s a way she could get rid of her Breaths. What she would need to do is Awaken something with a one-Breath Command. There are some. They don’t
do
much, but you can Awaken a very tiny scrap of cloth tied into the shape of a person with a very simple Command. That takes one Breath.

Next, you put the rest of your Breath into another object. Then you get that one Breath back and go hunting for a Drab to give it to. Then you take the rest of your Breath back from the object. From there, you can repeat the process if you want to. Vivenna could get rid of the Breaths one by one.

Of course, Denth didn’t want
that
to happen. He was coveting those Breaths. What he said was intended to sound like an innocent mistake. Many people unfamiliar with Awakening would make that mistake, so if Vivenna learned the truth later, he wouldn’t look suspicious.

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Lightsong Awakes from More Bad Dreams

This is the scene in the book where I originally started to turn Lightsong’s dreams a tad darker. As you can see from the final version, I’ve now been doing that from the beginning. All to keep tension up in the book.

Anyway, these dreams he saw—a prison, Scoot, Blushweaver—were there in the original draft. As I’ve said, I’m a planner, and so I had my ending well in mind by this point in the original version of the book. That ending changed in many ways during revision, but it’s kind of surprising how much stayed the same. Sometimes, things just work and you do get them right on the first try.

Lightsong Throws Pebbles to Count Priests

One of the challenges in writing these sections was that Lightsong could never do anything the “normal” way. He could have simply sent his priests to count at the gates, then come back to him with some figures. But it wouldn’t have felt right.

Despite his protests, Lightsong likes to meddle. He likes to pick at things and be involved. He couldn’t just send someone to count; he had to go count himself. And he had to do so in a properly flamboyant way.

This scene with the pebbles is important for far more than the obvious reasons. Yes, we’re furthering the mystery plots (though this particular one isn’t as important to the overall plot as some others). However, the more important part of this scene is how it shows Lightsong’s progression and growth.

I know what it’s like to finally find something to latch onto, something to drive you and give added purpose to your life. For me, it was writing. For Lightsong, it’s the investigation of the murder.

Spoilers

The tunnels become a focus for Lightsong, though the truth is that they’re not as important to the case as he thinks they are. Yes, there are things to be learned from them. Bluefingers has sequestered a large group of mercenaries down in a secure chamber under there. He’s also begun using Pahn Kahl Awakeners (yes, there are some) to Break some of the Lifeless. The tunnels are central to his plot of getting into the God King’s palace at the end of the book and securing it.

But Lightsong doesn’t know any of this, and doesn’t figure out most of it during the course of the book. (It’s left for the reader to infer.) Lightsong’s fixation with the tunnels is driven partially by the visions he’s been seeing at night, which include the tunnels and his discovery of Blushweaver being captured. He’s made a subconscious connection.

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Vivenna Begs

This chapter and the next one were originally a single chapter. In the drafting process, I realized that my original chapter just wouldn’t do. I’d been in a hurry to get on with Vivenna’s viewpoint, and I had been worried about spending a lot of time on the streets with her, since I didn’t want to retread ground I’ve seen in a lot of other books.

In this case, I was letting my bias against doing the expected thing make the book worse. Now, my drive to find new twists on fantasy tropes and plots usually serves me well. I think it makes my books stand out. You know that when you pick up a Brandon Sanderson fantasy novel, you’re going to get a complex, epic story with an original take on magic and a different spin on the fantasy archetypes.

However, this same sense can be problematic if I let it drive me too far. It’s nearly impossible to write a book that doesn’t echo anything someone else has done. It’s tough enough to come up with one original idea, let alone make every single idea in a book original. I think that trying to do so would be a path to folly—a path to rarely, if ever, completing anything.

In this case, we
needed
to have a longer time with Vivenna on the streets. We needed it to feel like she’d earned the sections of time she spent there. I knew I didn’t want to go overboard on it, but I also couldn’t skimp. So I sliced the chapter into two and added some material to each one, particularly the second chapter.

Vivenna Goes and Finds an Alley to Sleep In

One of the big stories I’m worried about channeling here is
Les Misérables
. It’s one of my favorite stories of all time, so sometimes it’s difficult not to find myself drawing upon Hugo’s story and characters. That constant fight to keep myself from leaning too much on what has come before went into overdrive in these chapters.

In the end, however, I think that Vivenna’s scenes belong here and accent the story. So yes, if you noticed them, there are some echoes of Fantine in these sections—Vivenna selling her hair and noticing the prostitutes most prominent among them. These two items, most of all, I considered cutting. But in the end, I decided that if there was anyone I was proud to have influencing my writing, it was Hugo, and I left the references. Partially as an homage, I guess—though that’s always the excuse of someone who ends up echoing a great story of the past.

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Annotations for Chapter Forty

Siri Bullies Treledees

Treledees, by the way, used to be called Tridees. My editor didn’t like the name, and so I swapped it.